Delhi, India

A few days back, I went to visit some famous places in Delhi with my friends, as we were feeling bored at the home, we don’t have much to do, also how are closed for 1 months. So we visited some of the most famous tourist destination like India gate, Rastrapati bhavan (House of the president of India), Red fort, and Nehru planetarium.

Now to tell you the truth, we have visited this places quite a few times before, so I think our excitement is not much as of those who visited the first time. Delhi has a lot of places to visit ranging from 500 years fort to the recently built Temple.

First, we visited ‘Rasatrapati Bhavan’ ( India’s president house). It was built before the independence of India. This is an offical resident of the president of India. People are not allowed to enter inside, so you aren’t gonna see our president. Just near this place, our parliament is also there. All I can say whole India run from there. As those are sitting there have tremendous power given by our constitution. The whole zone comes under high security, so don’t be surprise when you see the heavy deployment of police and army personal. 

 

And just 2 km from this place,  India Gate is there, again a famous place for tourist.

3 comments

  1. Writing Suggestions

    A few days ago back, I went to visit some famous places in Delhi (7) with my friends, as we were feeling bored at the home.  We didn’t don’t (1) have much to do since we were , also how are closed (2) for 1 (3) month months., so we visited some of the most famous tourist destinations, (3) like India Gate, Rastrapati Bhavan (House of the president of India), Red Fort, and Nehru Planetarium. (6)

    Now to tell you the truth, we have visited these this (3) places quite a few times before, so I think our excitement was is (1) not as great much as of those who visited it was the first time we visited.  Delhi has a lot of places to visit ranging from a 500-year-old years (4) fort to a the (5) recently built temple. (6)

    First, we visited ‘Rasatrapati Bhavan’ ( India’s president‘s house).  It was built before India became independent the independence of India.  This is the an (5) official resident residence of India’s the president of India. People are not allowed to enter inside, so you aren’t going to gonna (8) see our president.  Just Near this place, Our parliament is also near there.  All I can say is that the whole of India is run from there, as those are sitting there have tremendous power given to them by our constitution.  The whole zone comes under high security, so don’t be surprised when you see a the (5) heavy deployment of police and army personal personnel. (9)   And just 2 kilometers km (10) from this place,  there is India Gate is there, again a famous place for tourists. (3)

    Notes

    1. Since you are telling this in past tense, you need to keep your verbs consistent.
    2. “We were closed” is vague.  What is “we”?  Your place of employment was closed?  Your work was closed?
    3. You had several cases of singular-plural disagreement.  (1 months; this places; some of the most famous tourist destination; for tourist)
    4. The pattern is a 500-year-old fort, a sixty-minute trip, a 30-minute meeting.  (compound adjectives are hyphenated and singular).
    5. General rule of using “a” versus “the”:  “A” is non-specific.  “The” is specific.  If there is only one in the world, use “the”.  Otherwise, use “a” on first mention (one of many) and then use “the” AFTER first mention (now refers to the one you have previously mentioned.
    6. The name of a particular/specific place is called a proper noun.  All key words of a proper noun are capitalized.  The Statue of Liberty, the Nile River, the Eiffel Tower, the Great Pyramids of Egypt.  Common nouns (not the name of a specific place) are not capitalized.
    7. Is Delhi different than New Delhi?
    8. “Gonna” is not a word.  Never use this word.  “Wanna” is not a word either.  Neither is “u”.
    9. Personal = private to one person.  Personnel = staff; a body of people that all work at the same work place.  (pronunciations are different too)
    10. Generally, avoid abbreviations inside text paragraphs.
    11. “Enter” means to “go inside”.  We don’t normally say “enter inside”.

    Overall, good writing — clear and understandable.  If you have questions about any corrections, just ask.

  2. Thanks sir for correction. I am writing here because I wasn’t able to reply to your comment. Don’t know why.

    After seeing your correction, I realize that some of the mistakes can be easily corrected by me, had I review it before publishing the post.

    Sir, I will work on the suggestion that you have provided.

Leave a Reply